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June 11


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I saw that.

The way the words
stuck in the back of your throat like glue.
The way you held your tongue
for fear of ridicule if you spoke up for yourself.
The way the syllables gushed from their mouths,
a torrent of excuses,
when they did you wrong
because you didn't make your own case
and you should have been more forceful.

I saw that.

And I've been there, I've lived it.
I know it's hard to let their criticism
roll off your back when
they've already knocked you
flat on your face.

But I saw that.

And I won't let you fight it alone.
We could solve so many problems if we just stuck up for each other a little more.

As always, comments, discussion, and critiques are welcome!
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Ura-chi Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Words cannot even begin to explain how much I understand this... I know that feel :P

Coincidentally, I have a character who fits this description perfectly from both points of view (if that's possible). Well done, my good man :)
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much! it's always a pleasure to know someone can relate to my work :heart:
KatzeFisch Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you probably get a lot of comments like this, but wow... i read this, and i just... this is one of those poems i instantly fell in love with <3 this is how i am. I could be with my best friends and be so afraid to even start a conversation for fear of annoying, bothering, or chasing them away. people say mean things to me and it sticks with me, i go weeks just repeating it in my head and believing it no matter how much i try and tell myself that it shouldn't bother me and i should just forget about it. i got so used to hiding what i say (from a lot of past experiences) and admitting that no matter what i do is wrong that now i just cant stand up for myself nor feel like i /should/ stand up for myself. my boyfriend and i are happy, but the one thing we seem to bicker about it ill get so upset and he always just asks "Why do you care what they say? they aren't important to you" or "why don't you tell them off or something?" and things along those lines. i try to, but the words don't form and if i force it i start stuttering and make a fool out of myself and get laughed at then i'll spend the next months making fun of /myself/ until i just feel horrid and i feel like i'm the most stupid person on earth.. i dunno, i guess this poem just reminded me of all those feelings and how much more i will go through it
Sorry for the ramble, i just want to say this poem is absolutely amazing. any poem that can stir up memories and emotions is wonderfully written, be it happy sad painful or cheery. thank you for sharing this poem <3
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for such a heart-felt comment :heart:
I understand the feeling, and I think the most important thing is to remember that there is someone somewhere who genuinely cares about you - be it your boyfriend or your family or whatever - and the good and kind things they say can be your life-line. When the voices of those who ridicule you get stuck in your head, drown them out with your own voice, remind yourself of all the wonderful things about you. Even if you can't help but dwell on the bad things that people say, remembering to take extra time to dwell on the good things said about you can do wonders for your confidence. There's nothing wrong with building yourself up, in fact, you deserve it. And if there's ever a time that all you can hear is the cruel words of others racing in your mind, remember this: You dropped me a comment and were so sweet and open and honest and willing to share something very personal about yourself, and that tells me that you have more courage than you may realize. Remember that you are strong and beautiful in your own way and no one can change that. :tighthug:
oORockinRoseOo Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I left the front page to look at my messages, but I saw 'I saw that' and it pulled me right back to this page again. Just HAD to read it with a title like that! Eerily felt like I was being spyed on though...
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you!
PulpMyFiction Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
NitaVG Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Meaningful and true. 
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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