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He loved his bones.
The way they never asked too much of him
or protested his requests.
There was nothing superfluous in their design;
simple, sleek, and uncomplicated.
They were spry, robust
ready to take on the world with
sharp and fluid motions.

His bones were not brittle like she was.
Not so breakable or frail,
not so expendable.
They didn't bend under pressure
or fracture under stress.

He loved his bones -
their ivory purity eased his soul -
and he was proud of the way
they held everything together
so effortlessly.

She knew one day he'd stomp this
old flame out, long before 'death do us part.'
Cremation had never been part of the plan.
As always, criticism is welcome and appreciated :love:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DLR! This is so cleverly put together, I can definitely see why it got that recognition. :)
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :heart:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on your DLR :)
Beautifully how you described human bones in all their purity, rather innocence. But they are doomed to decay one day as it is all material.
Very thought-inducing work.
Keep it up!
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :love: I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome :)
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014
So well crafted. Well done.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :love:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014   Writer
Congratulations on the DLR "Pick of the Day"! This poem calls for thought by its readers and come up great to expectations.
The last stanza is very fine.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading :D
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014   Writer
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DailyLitRecognition Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognition) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my! :squee: Thank you so much!!
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RuntOfTheLitter Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
SO well written!

This OLD man has found that even his 'bones'
will SOMETIME BREAK ... But he's also found
that they most ALWAYS will also HEAL ....

SMILES ....

ROTL
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much!!
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butter-holiday Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
I love the nature of this. It's definitely unique. Great poem :)
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D
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NelehGrimm Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, this is really well done. I love the flow of it and I adore especially the last verse. :) great job.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :love:
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Quite beautifully connective. And, I have an osteophyte, so this is even more interesting for me.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Skeletal systems fascinate me so I had a particularly fun time with this one :D
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