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He loved his bones.
The way they never asked too much of him
or protested his requests.
There was nothing superfluous in their design;
simple, sleek, and uncomplicated.
They were spry, robust
ready to take on the world with
sharp and fluid motions.

His bones were not brittle like she was.
Not so breakable or frail,
not so expendable.
They didn't bend under pressure
or fracture under stress.

He loved his bones -
their ivory purity eased his soul -
and he was proud of the way
they held everything together
so effortlessly.

She knew one day he'd stomp this
old flame out, long before 'death do us part.'
Cremation had never been part of the plan.
As always, criticism is welcome and appreciated :love:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on your DLR :)
Beautifully how you described human bones in all their purity, rather innocence. But they are doomed to decay one day as it is all material.
Very thought-inducing work.
Keep it up!
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :love: I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome :)
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014
So well crafted. Well done.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :love:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014   Writer
Congratulations on the DLR "Pick of the Day"! This poem calls for thought by its readers and come up great to expectations.
The last stanza is very fine.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading :D
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz:
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DailyLitRecognition Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognition) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my! :squee: Thank you so much!!
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