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1. It starts early,
on a cloudy day when you recall
the 'childhood memories' of
two summers ago,
that's when you start your backslide into
growing up.
2. On the bright side
you won't notice this until you're
good and ripe in age,
so maybe it doesn't matter
anyway.
3. That tightness in your chest?
The feeling that you're not ready
to take on the rest of your life; it
never leaves.
4. It stews in the pit of your stomach
makes you doubt,
but there will be days when you look back
on the mountains you climbed -
the raging rivers you crossed -
and you'll have a sneaking suspicion you were
more prepared than you thought.
5. There's nothing like your own bed.
6. Laundry will never smell right
without mom's sweat and tears.
But you still have to separate lights from darks,
keep the zippers pulled tight
and the buttons unhooked.
7. There is comfort in your parents' presence.
8. Things change
the future gnaws and rips and
tears at all that you know.
There will be times when your heart
and soul are left so ragged
that they can't be
pieced back together. So
make new ones;
rebuild.
9. It's easier when you don't think.
10. It's easier when you don't think.
11. You may not realize it,
but you've taken your life for granted.
Can you imagine the molding
in your first home? The exact shape
of the windowsills kissing the curtains or
the shade of the carpet?
Things you saw every day
for years
and years
but never committed to memory.
12. Maybe you missed more
than just the fixtures in your house.
13. You can never have
too many hugs
and you're never too old
to go home -
seeking one out.
14. You're going to lose things.
The keys, an argument with your boyfriend,
the constant reminder that you are beautiful.
15. They can sense it, somehow.
They know when you've crossed
the invisible boundary into adulthood.
And suddenly you aren't that cute,
and your stupid jokes aren't that funny,
and no one feel the need to
build you up anymore
16. because you're an adult now.
17. It's easier when you don't think.
Literature
It's okay to be different
Fitting in's a trap:
they put you inside the box,
and then close the lid.
Literature
Growing Up
it seems that by now I’ve been diagnosed
with a mild case of weightlessness, mindless
drifting past empty homes and the emptier people
that purchased them. I remember conversations
with you about existentialism
and the almost intricate fabric of my mind and
everything in between, and you-- the way you
paused before making a point as
the words defined themselves in your head:
I remember the day I told you I was God.
Creator of all things unimportant, trapped
in the body of a girl with nothing left to give, you
believed me
it must be a beautiful place
inside your head, with a world
that revolves around hope and expectations
the way
Literature
A message to the broken
You drown yourself
in liquid sorrows,
letting the salty mess
burn your wounds,
and the sadness
to drip in your mouth,
consuming your words
and you say
you deserve the pain,
but I want to dry your face,
and whisper in your ear
how the clouds cry too,
while they hold such beauty,
and so do you.
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18. Growing up is like a disease -
acceptance soothes the heartache.
acceptance soothes the heartache.
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Oh! This is a wonderful representation of growing up. You’ve captured both the sweetness and the sadness of growing older. The way you formatted this is cool- the way it reads like a list. I’m a list maker myself, so I really appreciated that.
I really like #4- the way the emotions sway in that one stanza works SO well. The examples you’ve mentioned are so relatable, and the way you talk about change is beautiful. Change can be hard, change can be easy and you’ve represented that well.
Overall, a great read- a touching and makes me think (pun intended) about my younger years and how I have changed, as well as how much the world around me has changed.
Thank you so much for sharing your words.